
maybe it's snowing it tokyo maybe it's snowing in omaha and maybe there’s a shortcut tunnel between the two an easy commute thru the center of the earth an inter-dimensional breezeway of the soul a straightaway that stays true and there you are side-stepping two blizzards the long hallway is filled with portraits of dead uncles and other gorgeous goons who stare at you admiring at your shoes antique tables with antique candles and chihuahua zinnias in chinese vases the floor is covered in zebra skin rugs zebras sold separately there’s a gift shop that sells postcards of all your favorite memories (sunshine, razorblade skyline, sunburnt faces eskimo pies melting on a playground) nine for a dollar there’s a waiting room recently repainted and waiting to dry so you have to wait to wait in it that’s ok cause there’s a dumbwaiter that delivers old world newspapers printed on new paper made from reclaimed lumber but the same old news as yesterday there’s a gallery where you are on display where you stick your head into a cage and talk like a parrot (squawk! like a parrot! squawk!) but then something feels wrong something feels sick, oh no, you say where am i? this is not a dusty old museum, it’s a mausoleum it’s a warehouse full of funhouse mirrors center of your soul dead center of gravity where momentum goes to die it’s a prison you run and run but go nowhere and the more you run the more nowhere you go you try to leave but the doors are just painted on you try to sleep it off but wake up three hours before you slept and have to start over you rage at the walls in fast forward and super slow-mo simultaneously feeling like a poet who swore an oath of silence wears a black beret and striped shirt pulling a rope of pure hope catatonic catastrophic chthonic symbol of the dead and your skin feels cerulean and your breath is feathery and your mind feels glassy and your heart starts to foam and you don’t want to search for yourself inside yourself anymore cause a hole inside a hole is dangerous and ugly and unholy and it’s still snowing in tokyo still snowing in omaha and probably six foot deep and blowing sideways in rome and there’s a banjo in your pocket but you don’t know how to play it
note: i think i should get credit for using the word “mime” even though i didn’t use it… i mimed it =) just kidding.
posted for shay’s word garden word list
posted for the sunday muse #241
Wow! This is phenomenal, a glorious read. Loved and enjoyed every line and your closing lines are just perfect.
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thank you, glad you enjoyed it sherry
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Fabulous… the pace and the rhythm… totally enjoyed the poem!
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thank you, glad you enjoyed this
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Marvellously lyrical and imaginative.
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thank you misky
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I am tempted to pretend to be caught inside an invisible box and to press my white-gloved hands up against the invisible walls, just to acknowledge your silent use of “mime.” I do see that the mime costume did get included!
This piece is highly imaginative and takes a terrifying nightmare turn in the middle. You had me at snowing in Tokyo because i always love snowy Japanese scenes and snow monkeys and temples and all of that. Litte did I know i would end up in Hell’s waiting room. Poet, please never take an oath of silence. Your stuff is too good.
–Shay
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yeah, there seems to be something missing in the middle, the nightmare turn doesn’t seem justified, but i think i know how to fix it, i’m going to let it sit and stew for awhile before i play with it.
silence? never!
thanks shay
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You must have fascinating dreams my friend! This is amazing creative and a wild ride! I love it!
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thank you. i’m trying to do more of your sunday muse challenges this winter, but i write slow, so i try to get them done on time but never do =) also, you’re quite the talented poet, i need to follow your blog.
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“the floor is covered in zebra skin rugs
zebras sold separately
there’s a gift shop
that sells postcards of all your favorite memories”…
Captivating imagination! I went with you willingly – like Willy Wonka’s Chocolate factor until it turns scary… and ended up in a horrifying place! i just love your ability to create like this!
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thank you, glad you enjoyed this. yes, the ending a bit more scary then i intended, but its a wip, so, it’ll work itself out ecenually. thank again
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Such an amazing journey you take us on!! I loved all the detail – especially the old newspapers and the new paper and the old trees and the old news. I loved the creative ways you used all the words. I really enjoyed this poem.
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thank you. i was trying to hit upon a sense of redundancy with all those details, i hope it paid off… i’m not completely sold on this poem yet
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Wow! Fabulous write. Loved the rhythm and the twists and turn kept me on edge.
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so glad you liked it, thank you.
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Forking great, the entire thing. Just have to say though: “chihuahua zinnias” LOLOL! This is amazing too: “it’s a warehouse full of funhouse mirrors / center of your soul / dead center of gravity / where momentum goes to die” And then those last two lines. I vote you full credit for “mime.”
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thank you sir, glad you liked this
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Reads like a Lynchian dreamscape that draws you into into own logic and invents its own symbols of meaning. Well done!
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lynchian dreamscape, that’s an excellent assessment, thank you, glad you enjoyed it
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This is stunning read, Phillip! Just a major trip of monsterful proportions. I love the fact that it’s snowing somewhere around the scene, and the lines “side-stepping two blizzards” is wonderful.
But the way it ends is the icing on the cake:
“and there’s a banjo in your pocket
but you don’t know how to play it”
Absolutely love these lines! The best ending 🙂
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thank you sunra, not sure if i like it yet, still a wip
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Sometimes, wip’s are better in that they retain that raw freshness an unpolished piece has. I’d be interested to see how you edit it.
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