i felt you rise in the middle of the night shaking me awake as you lifted from the bed, i heard you walk down the hall, you were wearing socks, i heard them talking to the carpet, wool whispering to wool, i heard the light switch click in the kitchen and the ceiling fan start to whirl, i wondered what was keeping you up perhaps you were getting some water, perhaps you were going thru the bills again, drawing numbers on the backs of torn envelopes with a pen running out of ink perhaps you were thinking of windmills in wyoming, not the old fashion kind which you like, but the modern ones that make electricity, which you also like, tall sleek towers with long sleek blades, and all the wind of wyoming spinning them, pushing electrons down long black wires, thru windswept prairies, along oddly number highways, across state lines and into your kitchen ceiling fan, to make, of all things, wind circuit complete or maybe you were thinking of your mother, who passed last month, your heart still broken, thinking how she used to talk on the phone with both her voice and her hands, as if someone on the other end could see her hands explaining things, same as you do, circuit complete the same way i shave my father’s face every morning in the mirror, circuit complete and then i heard you walk back down the hall, dragging your sleepy feet, i heard the static in your footsteps, circuit complete, folding your shape back into my shape, circuit complete outside, the darkness was doing its darkness, crows were dreaming their crow-dreams, trees were speaking the language of leaves, you were wearing socks, i was wearing socks, and all the sheep asleep on the rolling green fields of new zealand were making socks
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I was going to say which lines I liked, and all that happy hopscotch, but I’ll just say this:
Your poem made me break down and cry. It’s so beautiful and everyday and
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yeah, i get a little stirred up by this as well, it’s a very fond memory… lost love, what can you do?
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There is a feeling of satisfaction in those circuits being completed. I hate to say grounding because it sounds like a pun, but… Anything we can count on is a blessing in its own way.
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so true, i’m glad you enjoyed this!
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Beautiful writing.
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thank you, arcdia, i’m glad you enjoyed this
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Your writing hums with a steady energy…circuits complete.
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thank you, lynn!
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Completing the circuit takes attention, fullness and socks. Well done!
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thank you, sir, so glad you enjoyed this one
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You are so good at doing this, getting everyday life down as it is, and as we need to see it , charged with meanings, connected, and connecting, but which because of our fragmented little monkey minds that are busy chewing on the bills and our new haircut, we so often don’t. The last lines here are such a comfort, so full of heart, and they wrap the poem up and make it speak with its full voice. Just excellent writing, phillip. Thank you for putting it out there for my tired old eyes to get some beauty this morning.
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thank you joy. i wanted the ending to feel like falling asleep, and sheep are always a good metaphor for sleep, a little cliche but hopefully i gave it a fresh treatment… thanks again
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I love LOVE L O V E this, Phillip. The night walk so beautifully drawn for us, the idle thoughts considered, and the returning to closeness. A time capsule of ordinary life,!
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thank you bev! so glad you liked this
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I love your sock poem, how you elevate the mundane and make it musical and special. Where would we be without our socks??
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thank you, glad you liked it
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My goodness this is breathtakingly evocative writing! 💝💝
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thank you
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A stunningly beautiful write, Phillip. I love all the thoughtful details and how each one opened up to encompass a whole cascade of others. The journey of the wind from Wyoming and back again, the whisper of socks, the mother who talks on the phone with her voice and her hands…everything speaking its own language. Utterly beautiful, I loved reading this ❤
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“everything speaking its own language” that’s what i was hoping for, that you sunra!
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You are most welcome 🙂
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This is perfect. I love how you’ve taken the mundane and given us pure emotion.
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thank you linda, glad you enjoyed it
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This is one of the best poems I’ve read in a while. Phillip. I particularly like that circuit between the windmills and the ceiling fan. And all the other circuits too…JIM
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I read this as being about you talking to yourself, a part of you—sort of like you were watching and listening to yourself at a distance, feeling a little out-of-body, but then coming back together in the end.
It’s gorgeous and sigh-worthy on all levels.
Favorites:
“talking to the carpet, wool whispering to wool”
“not the old fashion kind which you like, but the modern ones that make electricity, which you also like”
“all the wind of wyoming spinning them, pushing electrons down long black wires, thru windswept prairies”
“dragging your sleepy feet”
“folding your shape back into my shape”
“outside, the darkness was doing its darkness”
and that awesome ending, “you were wearing socks, i was wearing socks, and all the sheep asleep on the rolling green fields of new zealand
were making socks”
Your repeated phrase, increasing in frequency as the poem progresses, is very effective at gluing the story together.
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thank you shawna, this poem had been bubbling around in my brain for quite awhile, i think it turned out pretty well, so glad you liked it
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This poem is absolutely superb in every way.
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Brilliantly penned ❣️
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